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Monday, January 7, 2013

My 30 day challenges.

My first challenge is wake up at 7 everday and the way I going to achive this is first do my homework early second go to bed early third is have a alam bell so I can wake up at 7
Second challenge I'm going to do to is do not playing computer games and the way I going to achive this is first watch books, second do my homework, third do many stuff so I will be busy

2 comments:

  1. FIX:
    line 1: add "to" between "is" and "wake"
    line 1: everyday and the -> everyday. The
    line 1: add "am" between "I" and "going"
    line 1: first do -> by doing
    line 2: early second -> early. Second, I will
    line 2: early third is have a -> early. Third, I will have an
    line 2: 7 -> seven. (period)
    line 3: Second -> The second
    line 3: to is do not playing -> is not to play
    line 3: computer games and the -> computer games. The
    line 3: add "am" between "I" and "going"
    line 4: is first watch -> is by watching
    line 4: second do -> doing
    line 4: third do -> and doing
    line 4: add "that" between "so" and "I"
    line 4: busy. (period)

    You didn't invest much time on this as much as you did in your introduction. There are punctuation mistakes. Above, I told you two ways you can list things. First, you can use words like "first", "second", or "last"at the beginning of each sentence. Second, you can use commas and "and". Take this into your mind and do not make this mistake anymore.

    Waking up is really a challenge for me, too. You should build up a habit of waking up early at your age so that you can be diligent in the future.

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