Hello, Everyone. My name is Jason and I am 13 years old. My favorite sports are baseball and soccer and the reason I like them is because first it's fun and many can do it in the same time.
My favorite food is pizza and chicken because they are delicous.
My favorite baseball player is Lee Seung Yeop becaues his the best hitter in Korea, and Park Chan Ho because he was the best pitcher, also my favorite soccer player is Park Ji Sung because he's the best.
I like combination pizza the best because I want to eat many things at once, and my favorite chicken is fried chicken because I like the crunch feeling.
FINAL ESSAY ASSIGNMENT
12 years ago
FIX:
ReplyDeleteline 2: soccer and the -> soccer. The (run-on sentence)
line 2: because first it's -> that they're
line 2: many ... time. -> playable by many at the same time. (parallel adjective)
line 3: is -> are
line 4: becaues -> because (spelling)
line 4: Korea, and Park -> Korea. My other favorite player is Park
line 5: pitcher, also my -> pitcher. My
line 7: want -> like
line 7: once, and my -> once. My
line 8: crunch -> crunchy
Clear and to the point. Good writing. You just need to fix some run-on sentences. Run-on sentences are sentences that contain more than one idea and that are too long.
I also really like Park Ji Sung. He's my captain forever! I feel bad for him in his career at QPR. :(
Nice to meet you!^^